Song about My Suicide Attempt

[BenjiJoelCorrea]

Scarred reminders of a recent past
a story for each and every cut I lashed
They plague my mind with memories of a dark time
out of all the things that have been said
only your words are stuck in my head
And its taunting me ,why can't i just be normal



Why do I feel so alone
Why am I the only one who thinks that this is wrong
Im not a Loser,Not a freak
My life is just a broken seam
Lost in a trance of disbelief
Im so confused on what to
Without a friendly face in sight
The Music is where I belong tonight


I wanted to achieve my goal
it was lost when you took my soul
but would you worry if i took my life instead?

Im still not done with it, but tell me what you think

[reddie]

You are a great writer. Hear me out. What I mean by that is that I certainly don't doubt your suicide attempt. What I mean is that the way you put it into words, you put the images in my head was fantastic.

Keep writing. Ask English teachers and/or guidance counselors if there are any sort of publications, even if they're small ones.

Aim high.

[BenjiJoelCorrea]

You are a great writer. Hear me out. What I mean by that is that I certainly don't doubt your suicide attempt. What I mean is that the way you put it into words, you put the images in my head was fantastic.

Keep writing. Ask English teachers and/or guidance counselors if there are any sort of publications, even if they're small ones.

Aim high.

Thank you so much! that means alot to me to hear :whoops:

[PinkFloyd]

I don't know much about music or poetry but that was fantastic! I mean that sounded professional to me! I got so much imagery out of it. You should be a singer/songwriter when you grow up for sure.

-Rob

[Austin2]

That's really good man. Keep it up!

[StoneColdNicky]

I liked it. I am interested to hear it with music. What kind of sound do you have in mind?

[Texas warrior]

It is pretty good. It has good flow and grammar but needs a better rhyming scheam.