Poem about suicide TRIGGER ALERT

[jayyy-lmao]

Bang

I sat
Watching
Staring
Tears dripping from her eyes
Those eyes
Once beautiful,
Now tainted red from crying
Her hand was shaking as she wrote
Sobbing uncontrollably
The note was full of emotion.
All that emotion, in 2 short words.
I’m sorry.
She said it out loud.
Screamed it.
Shouted it at the world.
She put down the pen.
And picked up the gun.
"I’m sorry." She said one last time.
Bang.

[HexedDex]

It was very well written, quite sad.

[jayyy-lmao]

Sad was the aim. The poems I write are made to express that I want to do it, but I can't bring myself to it.

[Jess]

That was pretty heart breaking. Good job

[Lyra Heartstrings]

I'm not a big poetry writer anymore, but..it almost doesn't feel like poetry? Not all poetry rhymes, but it's more like a paragraph broken down. Just critique.

[Texas warrior]

It like it on the whole but hate how you wrote it. It doesn't relay seem like a poem.

[workingatperfect]

Yeah, I kind of agree that it's not very poemy. I know it's free verse, but it doesn't have any poetic elements really.

Oh, and I noticed all of your poems start with "I sat, watching." Is that like... a thing or something?

[Love.Hate]

not sure I like the layout, but emotion went into this and I like what was said.

[jayyy-lmao]

Yeah. Sitting and watching is turning into a theme.