MysticalBurrito
January 27th, 2013, 08:28 PM
I need help on the tone of a short story I have been writing. There are two alternative plots, one focused towards younger people and one that would probably have more appeal towards teens.
The first story would be about a hamster that has always wanted to become a detective and it trying to work his way up to detective status. The main conflict would be with a mouse named Nancy who kidnaps his best friend, Kevin. I also want to add some extremely light romance between Skippy and Kevin's sister, Brenda. Eventually the story would end with Skippy (main character) defeating Nancy in the factory she would be holding Kevin in.
The second story would be about a man who wants to become a detective to help avenge the death of his father during his childhood. He would have a female partner who goes on all these adventures to try and locate the man who killed his father. There would definitely be some romance between him and the female partner, but it wouldn't be the focal point of the story.
Which one seems to be more entertaining? Which one would grab your attention?
The first story would be about a hamster that has always wanted to become a detective and it trying to work his way up to detective status. The main conflict would be with a mouse named Nancy who kidnaps his best friend, Kevin. I also want to add some extremely light romance between Skippy and Kevin's sister, Brenda. Eventually the story would end with Skippy (main character) defeating Nancy in the factory she would be holding Kevin in.
The second story would be about a man who wants to become a detective to help avenge the death of his father during his childhood. He would have a female partner who goes on all these adventures to try and locate the man who killed his father. There would definitely be some romance between him and the female partner, but it wouldn't be the focal point of the story.
Which one seems to be more entertaining? Which one would grab your attention?