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Sugaree
October 21st, 2007, 12:32 AM
Home by the Sea. Home by the Sea.
Creeping up the blind side shimming up the wall and stealing through the dark of night. Climbing to the window and stepping to the floor. Checkign to the left and the right. Picking up th pieces putting them away. Something doesn't feel quite right. Help us someone! Let us out of here! When out of the dark we suddenly heard "Welcome to the home by th sea"

Coming through the woodwork through the open door pushing from above and below. Shadows but no substince in the shape of men. Round and round in cycles they go. They drifted in direction and showed all dispair and things were silent for more. Help us someone! Let us out of here! We've been here so long astir dreaming of the time we were free. So many years ago before the time when we first heard "Welcome to the home by the sea" Sit down. Sit down! Sit down, sit down, sit down. Sit down! As we relive our lives in what we tell you.

Images of sorrow, pictures of delight. Things that go to make up their lives. Endless days of summer, lonely nights of gloom just waiting for the morning light. Scenes of all importance like photo's in the frame. Things were went silence even more. Help us someone! Let us out of here! we've been waiting here so long astir dreaming of the time we were free. So may years ago before the time when we first heard "Welcome to the home by the sea" Sit down, sit down, sit down. Just sit down!

As we relive our lives in what we tell you both! Sit down! You won't get away because wit hus you will stay for the rest of your days so sit down! We will relive our lives in what we tel you both. Let us relive our lives in what we tell you both! Images of sorrow, pictures of delights. Things that go to make up their lives. Endless days of summer, lonely nights of gloom just waiting for the morning light. We will relive our lives in what we tell you both.

Sugaree
November 15th, 2007, 08:07 PM
I guess there is really no reason so I guess someone can lock it if they want to

Sugaree
November 17th, 2007, 07:24 PM
Oh come on ppl! This is not appealing or something?

Maverick
November 17th, 2007, 07:29 PM
People usually get turned off by trying to read one big block of text.

Underground_Network
November 17th, 2007, 07:32 PM
Whats up with the triple post and the request to have this thread locked?

Sugaree
November 17th, 2007, 08:59 PM
Sorry I thought ppl didn't like it. So I thought it would be better to get rid of it.

But don't do that. I want to know what you ppl think. Read all of it.

You couldn't tell but it was a writing I made during the time I posted it about ghost in a haunted house

western ninja
November 29th, 2007, 02:26 AM
it's quite good but needs seperation

Sugaree
December 10th, 2007, 02:42 PM
Yeah I'm working on that

zacharooo
January 1st, 2008, 11:59 PM
sorry as soon as i saw a big block of text i said "nah i aint gonnsa read this" sorry but thats what i feel

Serenity
January 2nd, 2008, 12:01 AM
sorry as soon as i saw a big block of text i said "nah i aint gonnsa read this" sorry but thats what i feel

Well then why did you even bother replying? The point of this forum is to post works of writing and get constructive criticisms in return. If you're just going to post an irrelevant comment about how you don't feel like reading it...don't.

zacharooo
January 4th, 2008, 10:31 AM
Well then why did you even bother replying? The point of this forum is to post works of writing and get constructive criticisms in return. If you're just going to post an irrelevant comment about how you don't feel like reading it...don't.


well in school they teach you constructive criticsms is what can make a better artiest!~ hey "icantdance" just look at it as a pointer!

Sugaree
January 4th, 2008, 12:46 PM
Well at least I seperated it like people want me to! You could have at least commented on that!

zacharooo
January 5th, 2008, 12:53 PM
i give you props on that

Sugaree
January 5th, 2008, 12:58 PM
Thanks. So did you like it?