American Muslim

[xXoblivionXx]

Here's a little poem I wrote, it's basically what I go through everyday. Please don't judge.

I was born in Chicago
I'm from Palestine
Think your life's complicated?
Wait until you hear mine

I wear the hijab
It's who I am, a part of me
Unfortunately, people are blind
They can't see the beauty of modesty

I'm trying hard I hope you can see
Trying hard to be the best I can be

Racist slurs come flying from here and there
It's hard, it's truly hard to bare
But I keep my chin up knowing it will be alright
For Allah is the most merciful, he will guide me to the light

I am an American Muslim

[Mortal Coil]

That shit still happens? I'm so sorry...
lovely poem. If only you lived over here in Singapore, am I right?

[PinkFloyd]

Oh I'm so sorry that this stuff happens to you. :(
Great poem though. :)

[Noirtier]

I'm sorry people treat you that way, just because of your religion and heritage. I know it happens to so many people for so many reasons every day, and it's just sickening that it happens. We live in a country where you are free to have whatever religious beliefs you choose, not a land where you should be oppressed for your views. I think the poem is wonderfully written, my only criticism would be the third stanza, where the words are a little repetitive, but overall wonderful job! :)

[Jupiter]

that is absolutely beautiful. very moving.

[nutjob]

That's a great poem :)
I hope that one day the racism will stop. It's just horrible how some people can be so discriminating, it's a shame.

[Lost in the Echo]

Awesome poem. :yes:
Sorry you've had to go through all of this though. :(
I hope things will get better for you. :hug:

[highschooler]

Very moving indeed. It is a good poem, except for the first stanza.

"Life is complicated/So listen to this rhyme" is a forced rhyme, and sounds cliche.

Switch it to:

"Think your life's complicated?/Wait 'till you hear mine."

Or not...Do what you want, It's your poem. I wish you all the best, and realize that those who hate are the most ignorant.

-E.B. 1-2-13

[xXoblivionXx]

Very moving indeed. It is a good poem, except for the first stanza.

"Life is complicated/So listen to this rhyme" is a forced rhyme, and sounds cliche.

Switch it to:

"Think your life's complicated?/Wait 'till you hear mine."

Or not...Do what you want, It's your poem. I wish you all the best, and realize that those who hate are the most ignorant.

-E.B. 1-2-13

that sounds much better actually. I wrote this ten minutes before going to a poetry slam and didn't really appreciate that part. Thanks for your comments :)

[Zenos]

Well If you where born in Chicago then how can you say that you're from Palestine?

I know it's just a poem and all but the first two lines contradict each other because
If you where born in Chicago,you're from America not Palestine.

[xXoblivionXx]

Well If you where born in Chicago then how can you say that you're from Palestine?

I know it's just a poem and all but the first two lines contradict each other because
If you where born in Chicago,you're from America not Palestine.

I get where you're coming from but I was trying to convey that I'm American, born in Chicago. But my origin, my roots are from Palestine.

[Guillermo]

I get where you're coming from but I was trying to convey that I'm American, born in Chicago. But my origin, my roots are from Palestine.

Maybe you could write that in your poem, then. Something like "my roots are from Palestine" or "my roots are planted in Palestine". I don't know, because I'm not much of a poet.

This issue is nothing new, but it's great that you're bringing more attention to it. It's a shame that some U.S. citizens don't see that Muslims/Islam =/= terrorists or bad people. It's also a damn shame that some people, specifically Christians, don't see how closely linked Christianity and Islam are, and that they both have the same foundations.

[Zenos]

I get where you're coming from but I was trying to convey that I'm American, born in Chicago. But my origin, my roots are from Palestine.



Oh ok i get it now.:D

[MrDaniel2K13]

That's a well written poem