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Mortal Coil
November 17th, 2012, 08:00 AM
Okay, so I wrote this poem, and I know it's not a very good one, but I still can't think of a title. Maybe you could help me out, here's the text of it:

Walk home from the store,
Collar turned against the snow,
Fingers turn to ice.

I chose to wrap it
In purple tissue paper
And a blue ribbon:

Her favorite colors,
Mother tongue scrawled on the card—
I know, she'll love it.

It was not until
The obituary was
Published, that I knew

All of my hard work
Wasted! On three dozen pills
and a full bathtub.

I live much too far
To attend her funeral.
Rest in peace, my friend


THANKS for your input!

TigerBoy
November 17th, 2012, 08:37 AM
"Waste"

This seems to be about the waste of life and the emotional impact on the speaker contemplating their wasted effort.

Emerald Dream
November 17th, 2012, 09:10 AM
"Snowdrop"

A funeral flower that ironically means "hope." You also reference snow in the poem.

West Coast Sheriff
November 18th, 2012, 01:44 AM
"Waste"

This seems to be about the waste of life and the emotional impact on the speaker contemplating their wasted effort.

I like thus idea and btw, the poem is pretty good. :D