The Blood Woman (Poem)

[BrassMonkey]

This is something I came up with randomly out of boredom at school. I wanted to see what you think, so any feedback is good.

"Drip, Drip, Drop, the Blood dripping throughout the cold, foggy night,
getting colder and then warm as she begins to take a bite.
Oh the tingling starts as she begins to get high,
so little and so good, but its only enough to satisfy.
Now she is strong and no longer weak,
but its time to set out to leave, and begin search for next week."
- Bryce

[West Coast Sheriff]

Nice, I like it.

[Gigablue]

TWPR :arrow: The Open Book

[Jabbawocke]

Lol i likeit :P

[Mortal Coil]

I like it, but you could continue with the macabre themes throughout, instead of having the first couplet be ridiculously gothy and then the rest of it sounding like a druggie's third-person account of their addiction. Just needs a little consistency, otherwise great (Y)