Every Dollar is a Death Wish

[LetsKillTonight]

I cut up my wrists like cheap coupons,
Did you know that blood is on sale today?

There's a suicide note in every dollar bill,
But only fools think that money can take the pain away.

Masochism is my new religion,
I preach the words into my skin with razor blades and blood stains

I'm getting married in this chapel.
But not to anyone you know. I am betrothed to the pain.

I'm gambling with cuts and cards up my sleeves
I've drawn my hand and I throw down my chips as the pain fades.

This casino is quickly running out of blood.
The last card I draw has no power to save me, a lousy two of spades.

Now my pockets are empty and the red stains have dried.
The life force inside is spent.

I cut up my wrists like cheap coupons, the razor slips
And the blood falls. The green paper is jagged and rough, the corners crooked and bent.




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(I apologize for the atrocious phrasing and terrible use of rhymes. I just wanted to throw this out there because it is kinda how I'm feeling right now... )

[Syvelocin]

Sorry, I found The Fight Song reference to be too obvious, I got caught up in it. I did a series of three poems about Coma back in '10, personifying her, exploring Omega's eventual realization that she isn't real and never will be, and then killing himself over it. It was a lot of fun. Manson's stuff is great food for thought, but I would make the reference a little less noticeable than using pretty much the exact metaphor. I don't really get how the slightly different wording influences the meaning, like you're instead willingly exchanging the pain for... blood? But then I get an obvious theme of relating blood to money, gambling the money chip by chip, gambling the blood drop by drop, sacrificing the pain and resources for the chance at what it could get you. At least that's how I perceived it.

[justinglives]

Like it.

[BrassMonkey]

I like it, its very visual which makes it interesting.

[PinkFloyd]

I though it was a realy deep thought that was put onto paper by what should be a profesional poet.

[AndyWarhol]

I don't think it was deep, If anything it seems unoriginal and done before. It's just the same self-harm bullshit, just put differently. No offense, but I'm just telling the truth.

[Breakeven]

i like it :3

[PrimedPenguin]

This is a great poem. It's depressing so you pulled off the climate spectacularly. I loved the casino analogy I think it realy fit the story.

[survivor]

I understand the poem and I like it, but I could never compare my cutting and the shit in my life to gambling. If you cut too deep its a gamble on your life, but its not using all of the chips like you described unless you cut an artery. You do feel on a high when you slice yourself open, but at least I'm starting to go low before the blood even stops. The blood isn't the feeling its the pain of cutting, not feeling numb anymore. Feeling something other than sad. At least to me when I cut.

[West Coast Sheriff]

It's kind of dark but I like it. It expresses your pain and that is a great way of letting out emotions.