Prison

[TheWaterPrince]

We all live in a prison
Whose walls we build ourselves
We cannot escape, we cannot hide
The prison we live in,
Is the fear we all carry deep in our minds

Just something I thought up any thoughts?

[Noirtier]

The first thing that comes to mind for me is I would suggest adding some more punctuation in there. As it stands, the flow of the ideas is very confusing as it's all one big sentence. I like the concept, but it might be nice to expand on it some. Make a couple more stanzas. See where things lead from there. Just kind of play around with the idea a bit and see what you end up with. I like the last line very much, and I think overall as just a short idea you did a good job. I would definitely recommend playing around with it and seeing where it takes you!