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Serenity
September 7th, 2007, 03:19 PM
A simple life is something I crave
A walk in the park, a night under the stars
Treasuring keepsakes in childhood made
Playing outside with the family dog
Trapped in this world I cannot stay
Got protect me as I wander wherever I may
Grant me peace and joy and love
May I one day join you in Heaven above

Hauptmann Kauffman
September 7th, 2007, 05:07 PM
Great Poem!

Serenity
September 7th, 2007, 10:31 PM
Thanks! I struggled with 'wander wherever' b/c I hate alliteration but the only replacement I could think of was 'travel' but when you travel you generally have a destination, whereas wandering more portrays the message of being lost and searching for something....

Crazysam
September 8th, 2007, 05:30 AM
seriously that is great work!

It kind reflects a little on me at the moment as i am going to move school some time soon and i'm a bit worried about it all :)

Serenity
September 8th, 2007, 09:53 AM
thanks, Sam! :daisy:

And yeah, I think there are a lot of people who can relate to it...