A '99' I wrote for my English writing class

[RedViper]

For those who don't know a '99' can only have 99 words, no more no less. (Not including the title)
The title is somewhat misleading, it's more about a different side of love i guess.
This is edited from the original.
Any feedback welcomed. :)

Love
The bathroom mirror reflects the bruise on her cheek and the cut on her lip. Every day he says “I love you,” but she doesn’t believe him anymore, she’s numb to words. He’s passed out in the lounge chair with a half empty can of Jack in his hand.
She’s sick of seeing this broken image of herself. She throws the porcelain soap holder at the mirror. He stirs. Covering her hand with her long sleeve she takes a shard of mirror and goes to him. He’s taking a drink of Jack, baring his throat. She raises her hand.

[xXoblivionXx]

it's pretty good :)

[RedViper]

Thanks :)

[Breakeven]

its nice , shows a lot of emotions!

[Mirage]

its nice , shows a lot of emotions!

Agreed. I really like this! If I tried to write one of these I would fail soo hard :P

[Mob Boss]

That was great! You were descriptive, yet still short and to the point. It reminds me of Red Jumpsuit Apparatus song Face Down

[Incompris]

I liked it very right to the point *claps*

[Mob Boss]

Oh good point, Jonathan. I forgot to clap.

*Standing ovation and an obnoxious "woot" from the chick in the back* :D

[chica_imperfecta]

I like how the beginning and ending are sort of undefined. It leaves you wanting to know what happened before and what happens next. Good job!!

[RedViper]

Thank you all so much :)