Kill me

[Wintergirl_80.0]

Kill me
Im begging you please
loving you
is like a deadly disease
your my heroine
my addictive drug
I just wish it wasnt so painful
falling in love

[Texas warrior]

It's okay.

[Wintergirl_80.0]

yeah its not my best but i wrote it when i was like 13 or 14...

[Mortal Coil]

Well, considering how young you were when you wrote it, not bad at all. I definitely think that if you corrected your spelling/grammar and then fleshed out the ideas a little more, it could be great.

[Wintergirl_80.0]

thank you but typicly i dont modify my poetry

[Scooby Dooby Drew]

thank you but typicly i dont modify my poetry
That's a policy you may want to rethink; editing one's work is very important if one wants to write to their fullest potential. Simply throwing something up onto the page, even if it's a good idea or is full of passion and emotion, will never be refined or sophisticated; it takes careful planning and thought to really polish something to shine its brightest.
...Also, what's the point of posting it here, if not to get feedback?

[Wintergirl_80.0]

i dont mind feed back that comment was not ment as a bitter comment

[Lolli]

I liked it

[Breakeven]

nice :o i like it

[Wintergirl_80.0]

thanks

[xXoblivionXx]

I like it, good job :)

[Wintergirl_80.0]

thats pretty