Creative Writing

[Totality]

I have attached my creative writing as of 12/04/2012.

I currently have block. So I thought I'd get some feedback on what I written so far. Please note, I only mainly write when I'm bored or depressed.

The attached document is 36 pages at A5.

5,882 words.

All Feedback Appreciated.

Still Untitled.

Enjoy,

Ryan

[KarkatLuv]

reading now, will get back to you once i'm finished, but i'm such a bloody slow reader that it may take a while ^_^

[Gothicdeer]

My phone won't let me view it :(

[Totality]

Any and All Feedback is welcome :)

[Phazit]

First of all, may I say thank you for posting this!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your work - it is apparent that you have potential.
Unfortunately (or perhaps fortunately for you) I am not very efficient when giving feedback pertaining to technical properties of your writing - but at first glance there is nothing outlandishly incorrect with your grammar. I like your style and will encourage you to continue writing!
Good luck.