Dead Inside

[Wintergirl_80.0]

dreams?
thats how it feels
alive?
im not even sure if i'm real
hope?
don't know what that means any more
faith?
i think i had that before
God?
i dont feel him there
help?
too lost in this nightmare
scars?
yeah they were made by me
rope?
its the last thing i'll see

[Imm1ck3y]

Get a hold of yourself and do away with these dark feelings Winter. You can and do have the strength to make it through whatever it is your going through.
Nice poem if anything, but try to make poems about things you like and enjoy and about being happy instead of about commiting suicide. Your a great poet from what I can tell and I believe the best way to get through what your going through is to visualize the good in people and write about it.
Good luck Winter, you have my support.

[Spook]

I like the question pauses you put in the poem- it adds a sort of suspense. As for the subject, it really speaks and alot of us can relate to it. If this is about you specifically, I agree with Michael. Think about the good things in life- I do know that expression through writing gets alot off your mind though. Overall, very nice poem- well written. :)

i love the a b c b d e f e g h i h j k l k rhyme scheme you used- a personal favorite of mine to write the un-rhyming one-word lines then follow with a rhyming verse.

[Wintergirl_80.0]

thanks you guys i write some happy stuff but its not as good... plus tyhis is my release :)

[Imm1ck3y]

Sorry if I misinterpreted your poem : (

[Wintergirl_80.0]

you didnt i wrote that earlier this year when i was suicidle