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Imm1ck3y
March 5th, 2012, 07:23 PM
Humans are quite..bothersome, thought August as he silently observed the Alexander and the warrior speak. August exhaled a silent flame from his nostrils.
"Thanks for the food." said Alexander, a strange expression on his face.
"No problem." replied the warrior with an extravagant smile.
Alexander bit into another graciously large piece of meat.
He chewed as he spoke, "Who are you?"
"Gale Fulbright." replied the man.
August's ember eyes glowed bright. The man's name was nothing more than a fabrication. Should he warn Alexander? No, that child knew better than to accept help from him. Alexander could fend for himself as far as he cared.
He returned his attention to Alexander and the impostor.
He noticed Alexanders emotionless expression and immediately knew that Alexander didn't believe him either.
"What brought you here?" inquired Alexander, throwing his bone away.
A muscle twitched near the warrior eye and he shifted uncomfortably.
"I was searching for any survivors and decided too look around here," the man gestured to the charred remains of what might have been a church.
"And decided to bring my weapon along with me just in case I found any enemies. Seems like I found the Prince of our Glorious nation of all people!"
He laughed dryly and wiped some blood off of his cheek.
"Hmm..." Alexander began.
"It must have startled you when the explosion happened, huh?"
The warrior nodded "Of course it did! It was so unexpected, it caught me completely offguard!"
"I'm sure it did."
The warrior narrowed his eyes, lost as to what Alexander meant.
"What do you mean?"
Alexander grinned. "A man who is searching for survivors and brings a weapon in case he encounters any enemies.."
The warrior put on a puzzled expression "And..."
"I think your enemies are the survivors."
The warrior chuckled humorlessly.
"To me, a man who ambushes an innocent man like me without even thinking about whether I was a survivor or not strikes me as quite odd."
Alexander pointed at his clothes and stared at the Man "I fail to see how someone wearing these rags and looking at a shiny stone on the ground could possibly be mistaken for an Enemy."
The warrior said nothing and gazed straight into Alexander eyes. The warriors posture had changed from a nervous crouch to a relaxed hunch. He stroked his chin softly in a nonchalant manner. He seemed amused.
Alexander didn't seemed surprised, nor did he seem to care. August flapped his wings with renewed vigor. This is quite entertaining, thought August.
"Furthermore, You only 'realized' that I was a prince after you realized that you had lost. Not only that but your style of fighting doesn't strike me as that of an inexperienced civilian." Alexander paused briefly, "You know how,who or why this explosion happened and which army carried it out."
"How do you even know there was a battle here to begin with?"
"We can begin by telling me your real name."
"Don't get ahead of yourself."
"I don't plan to." Replied Alexander, a contemptuous grin painted across his face.
"Do you have any idea who you might be dealing with?"
"Do I come off to you as someone who cares?"
"I think you do."
"And what exactly might you know about me?" asked Alexander incredulously.
"Enough."
Alexander left eyebrow reached the clouds.
August was impressed, never before had he seen a human exhibit such intelligence. "You, or whomever you work with has killed hundreds of innocent people and destroyed this town. That person will get what he deserves." threatened Alexander. The warrior pulled out a small vial and drank from it.
"This is," a murderous glance was shared between the two, "quite interesting."
With his bright red eyes and fiery wings ignited from excitement, August found that he couldn't agree more.

Imm1ck3y
March 6th, 2012, 03:58 PM
"Kaule, Kaule L. Magnum." replied Kaule.
The prince stared him down suspiciously.
"Why exactly are you here?" Alexander narrowed his eyes "Kaule."
Kaule decided to ignore the arrogant princes gesture and replied "I'm here for you."
The Prince responded with a simple question "Why?"
"You probably do not wish to know."
"Why not?"
"You are not ready for it."
Kaule appeared to have annoyed Alexander quite a bit with the remark.
Kaule continued "I can still-"
"Kill me if you wanted to." interrupted Alexander, all traces of sarcasm gone from his voice. Kaule couldn't help but smile at that, this prince was more than intelligent, he was a genius. He had deciphered so much from so little. Kaule was wrong to expect any less from him.
"I could tell by the way you fought. You fought with such recklessness and impulsive attacks as to be idiotic. I can understand blind rage from the explosion and its aftermath, but you overplayed it. A real warrior would have realized instantly that he had met his match and would have fought carefully and strategically, or at the very least, might have paused to reconsider his plan of action, yet you did none." Alexander paused to reflect, and then continued "Furthermore, all armies or military men are trained from day one to utilize the environment and positioning to the best of their abilities, it's a prerequisite to any further training. And due to how condensed the population is, urban warfare is hard-wired into your training. You once again, did none of these things."
Alexander looked at the bone on the ground. "Which leads me to believe that you are most likely not a part of any army belonging to this kingdom. You must, therefore, be a foreigner, from somewhere presumably far away from here. And you intentionally hid your whatever power it is you have from me...
To make me believe that you're weaker than you really are." Alexander licked his lips, deep in thought "This was planned somehow, you knew I was here..." Alexander shrugged and stood up.
Kaule stroked his chin softly, he had no response.
Alexander lips curved into a grin as he turned away from him. He stared idly at the sky "Where's the next town?"
"I don't know anymore than you do." answered Kaule.
"I wasn't asking you."
Who could he possibly be talking to? Looking around, Kaule couldn't see or hear anything other than Alexander and the destroyed town they were in. Was Alexander crazy? Kaule scratched his head and ran his fingers through his hair.
He examined Alexander closely.
"Why haven't you shown yourself to him yet?" inquired Alexander, once again speaking to thin air. Alexander turned to face him "The town should be about 15 kilometers northwest from here." Kaule stared at Alexander stupidly. What the hell was going on? He sighed and reluctantly picked up his luggage and his sword.
"Is this were we part ways?" asked Kaule.
"No, your coming with me, I think I remember something."
What in the world is with him? Thought Kaule. He watched as Alexander picked up a stone from the ground and examined it for about three seconds and suddenly turn around to face him again "Let's go."
Kaule shut his eyes for half a second and exhaled, if it came down to it, he always had the option of killing him.

monkeyfish
March 6th, 2012, 05:02 PM
I like it, but you Alexander far too often, you used it at least 5 times in the first 8 lines. It's too repetitive, try and find another way to show who your talking about, even if the name was just abbreviated to Alex it would be an easier read. But other than that i like it

Imm1ck3y
March 6th, 2012, 06:33 PM
OK, sry, I'll try to cut down on that in the future.

*Edit
On a side note, when I'm talking about one person, I don't have that many problems with it, but when I'm dealing with two or more, i'm just so horrible and bad at keeping tags with them and knowing who I'm talking about...Anyone have any tips to help?

Imm1ck3y
March 7th, 2012, 11:30 PM
I got some fresh new ideas, I'll update this tomorrow with a new chapter.
Oh and btw, should I keep everything in one thread or make a new one for each chapter?