He Broke Her (a sonnet)

[Wintergirl_80.0]

She once felt so lively, so beautiful
She used to stand so tall and be so strong
Her eyes once shone so bright, so wonderful
She used to be such a glorious song
But he was afraid of her burning light
He feared the power of the song she sings
So he kept her in the darkness of night
And he clipped her once magnificent wings
No longer do her eyes shine like the stars
And silenced is her melodious voice
though her heart is covered in bleeding scars
She’d go back to him if given the choice
‘Cause she is in love with a twisted lie
She is a young innocent butterfly

[Mortal Coil]

Aside from the last line, I love it. It actually made me tear up a little.
The poem in general is about loss of innocence and freedom (I think), so the metaphor of a butterfly and the words "young, innocent" are somewhat conflicting with the rest of it.

Is this about... what happened to you?

[Smeagol]

This is really well done. It is sad but it has a powerful message. Maybe naive would be a better wording than 'young, innocent'. Is this from your own experience?

[Wintergirl_80.0]

yeah it is and the last line has meaning to me but i see what you mean. my older brother from another mother ... and father ... he has no relation to me.. calls me butterfly. but the guys name was lance and he broke me into pieces cuz he only lied...

[Jess]

so beautiful @[email protected]

[Wintergirl_80.0]

thank you this isnt even one of my good ones