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Darkezta
April 22nd, 2007, 07:13 AM
Hey all, i write sum stuff but this one thing i wrote for a girl she said it wass awsome, but i think she just says it not to hurt my feelings, so here it is can u people just hounestly tell me what u think about it plese. :confused:



I am the one wandering the corridors of my mind, and walking the road of my heart, and seeking the avenger, thiy avenger who one day i would find as me. Walking over the cracks of my my broken heart, that broken heart wich wud be heald by the avenger of the spilled blood of a once proud father. And if i the mighty avenger lies on the cold hard ground i will say to my asailant:"if i die i shal kill u, but if i live u shall be forgiven". Such is the way of honour.

DouggyO.o
April 22nd, 2007, 07:34 AM
Puberty for girls---> The art Room

ForeverBlue
April 22nd, 2007, 07:37 AM
I like it. I really like the descriptive details and the connotations of everything.