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Amaryllis
August 27th, 2011, 11:08 PM
Mummy dear,

I hate the way you smile
I hate the anger in your eyes
I hate the way you think you're right
I hate all your stupid lies

I hate the way you set your lips
I hate the way you look at me
I hate the words that hurt the most
And the rotten egg you've let me be

I hate the things you've let me know
I hate the scars you've left behind
I hate the memories that never fade
I hate the mother I will never find

I hate being the stupid kid
The little failure in your eyes
The crazy thing that cuts itself
And starves to death in the meantime

I hate being the messed up child
The angry mess that says cruel things
A savage creature who destroys
A broken doll on broken strings

I hate not being the child you want
I hate myself because I tried
I hate this stupid little world
I hate you but I lied

Iris
August 29th, 2011, 01:49 PM
Sigh. This poem really touched me, because I can relate with everything except the anorexia and my mother knowing I cut (I would never let that happen). It's tough having this kind of relationship, especially with a mother, who supposed to always love and nurture you... :/

Objectively speaking, you did a great job at conveying your emotions. I could feel the resentment you felt, and the uncertainty in the end, about hating your mother. The poem runs smoothly and seamlessly; it's not messy and I doesn't sound like those poems that sacrifice integrity just to rhyme. Really great work.

I hope you don't mind me stalking all your art :whoops:

fenrirdies
August 29th, 2011, 06:08 PM
hmh I could really get into poetry like this

Amaryllis
August 29th, 2011, 09:11 PM
@lilys
Awww thanks so much :) you've got me smiling all day now. Fell free to stalk my art xD it'd make me so happy to know I'm worth stalking.

@jamani
I'm glad. Thanks :D