One shard at a time (please rate from 1 to ten and any feedback thank you)

[nahtE]

One Shard at a Time

joker's laugh and joker's wain
hellbent on this putrid pain
just for laughs the young one said
for when this shard has fallen
we will all be dead

child's play and child's cry
why is it that all should die
just for fun the young one said
for when this shard has fallen
we will all be dead

hell's fire and hell's bane
held down by satin's chain
just for kicks the young one said
for when this shard has fallen
we will all be dead

heart's pain and heart's ply
again denied our will fly
just for cheers the young one said
for when this shard has fallen
we will all be dead


this child is sin
and with all of us
within

oh come on ppl i dont bite id really like to hear what you guys have to say

[Jimmy Page]

I liked it,its really good :)