Dark_Desires
August 15th, 2011, 01:13 PM
As the title sugest im writing a book so far im writing when i feel like it.
So i thought i share chapter 1 with u its a draft so excuse poor grama
I stare at the planet with a gaze of awww.As we come into land reports role in over the radio
(all units divert chaos hydra units on site) As leader of the storm ravens lightning legion
i had to decide either to land safe and march far or go in with all our might.At that moment i
new the ansewer i used my coms in my mark IV lightning legion power armour to attack without
fear (all units charge weather this flak for the heratics will suffer the ultimate punishment)
As my thunderhawk shook and rattled i felt fear i put that fear away and summoned my rage.As
we aproached the flak zone i orderd the pilot to fly is in like a knife he ryplyed yes sir
with a fear.I orderd the battle barge the sword of lightning to flank around the chaos base
and to use torpedos and then land at the ourskirts.The captain quickly said aye sir.I had know the
captain from a op on magelian to rid the planet of nids so i new he would listen to me most captains
would just refuse but he had courage.We were 1000 meteres above the base i orderd the pilot to get us
in anyway he new how he did.As we we came in a flak round shot thru the lower deck and killed
sentinal mach.We came in and landed with a big thud i felt the jug thru my spine. the door opend
i felt mass amount of rage fear and adrenaline.I charged out with my men behind we cut the chaos
cultists down quickly.Thay were not match for us.We reached the great deamon gate and prepared for
the fight of our lives
Basicaly the story is about commander lyons and him fighting a not winable war.I kept it set in 40K with stuff from various games and tv shows movies.
I am trying to build a deep story and any character big or small gets a decription.So please tell me what u think and anything u think mite add more detail and depth
So i thought i share chapter 1 with u its a draft so excuse poor grama
I stare at the planet with a gaze of awww.As we come into land reports role in over the radio
(all units divert chaos hydra units on site) As leader of the storm ravens lightning legion
i had to decide either to land safe and march far or go in with all our might.At that moment i
new the ansewer i used my coms in my mark IV lightning legion power armour to attack without
fear (all units charge weather this flak for the heratics will suffer the ultimate punishment)
As my thunderhawk shook and rattled i felt fear i put that fear away and summoned my rage.As
we aproached the flak zone i orderd the pilot to fly is in like a knife he ryplyed yes sir
with a fear.I orderd the battle barge the sword of lightning to flank around the chaos base
and to use torpedos and then land at the ourskirts.The captain quickly said aye sir.I had know the
captain from a op on magelian to rid the planet of nids so i new he would listen to me most captains
would just refuse but he had courage.We were 1000 meteres above the base i orderd the pilot to get us
in anyway he new how he did.As we we came in a flak round shot thru the lower deck and killed
sentinal mach.We came in and landed with a big thud i felt the jug thru my spine. the door opend
i felt mass amount of rage fear and adrenaline.I charged out with my men behind we cut the chaos
cultists down quickly.Thay were not match for us.We reached the great deamon gate and prepared for
the fight of our lives
Basicaly the story is about commander lyons and him fighting a not winable war.I kept it set in 40K with stuff from various games and tv shows movies.
I am trying to build a deep story and any character big or small gets a decription.So please tell me what u think and anything u think mite add more detail and depth