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Amaryllis
August 10th, 2011, 07:45 AM
YOU FAT PIG

90.
Nobody loves me because I'm ugly and worthless.

85.
I'm not good enough, I have to be better.

80.
Why can't you do anything right?

75.
Self-control, you fat pig.

70.
I'm not skinny enough.

65.
Not good enough.

60.
Am I beautiful?

55.
Still too fat.

50.
Ugly.

55.
I'm fat.

60.
You fat pig.

65.
Losing control.

70.
You're too heavy.

75.
You fat pig, you ate.

80.
Time to stop. No more.

85.
You don't deserve to eat.

90.
No one will ever love you now.

95.
You have to stop eating. You're fat.

100.
No. Stop. You're ugly. Everybody hates you.

110.
You fat pig. You're fatter than everyone. You should die.

100.
Skinnier. Don't eat. Skinnier. Skinnier. Skinnier.

95.
Starve. You can do it. Good girl.

You need to be 0.
Yes, zero.
Zero
0
.

Magus
August 10th, 2011, 07:57 AM
This is kind of creative. What those number represents? I think they are weight scale, and zero here signifies death after starvation, am I correct.

Sogeking
August 10th, 2011, 08:24 AM
Yeah and you'll notice that the number corresponds to the stanza length. Which is pretty cool.

Overall, I really like it. :P You got potential.

Amaryllis
August 10th, 2011, 08:44 AM
Thanks to both of you. I actually thought this was one of my dumbest and worst poems haha... It's not even really a poem. I'm glad y'all like it though!

And yeah, they're my weight. 0 represents death and my desire to disappear, I guess. I can't talk coherently to people, only in poems haha. So umm... Yeah. Interpret it how you want :)

Thanks again