Walking Onion[Poem]

[RoseyCadaver]

Oh walking onion,
How do you do?
You're fine?As am I!
To see a walking onion,now that's a quibble!
Do you play sports,can you dribble?
The other onions will pick and tease,
compared to them you're small in size,
But you most definitely caught my eyes
It's just nice to see an onion who can walk and talk
Most stay in the ground ,with smug upright stalk
They can't see the time on the clock
Or the sun of the day
Most onions don't have a clue
They aren't as lucky as you.



My inspiration :3
http://www.anniesannuals.com/signs/o/images/onion_egyptian_walking.jpg


What do you think?

[Angel Androgynous]

I like it, but for better flow, try to make it:
"You are fine?
As am I!"
Otherwise, I love it! Reminds me of Alice in Wonderland. C:

[afronteboi]

I can totally understand it cause to me a walking Onion doesn't, literally mean a walking Onion, but figuratively people are like onions, many layers, it's really great use personification.