Shadows(poem)

[RoseyCadaver]

Here is a little poem I wrote as I was bored.Positive criticism please.

It's a poem about how we are controlled by the way we look,unlike the shadows.



The shadows dance in the light
Having fun,while we fight.
They bear prejudice or hate
no matter gay or straight.
They're all the same,just one.
While we're divided into sums.
We think that they aren't real,
but they know they're living the deal.
So while they freely have fun,
We are controlled,by the visible
colors of the sun.

[Mynameisconner]

I honestly love it! If anything I think comma re-arrangement or insertion could add emphasis through the pauses. I like your incorporation and depth into what shadows do. Brilliant :)

[skater94]

You're quite the poet. The theme is really clever!