Whats Wrong

[TheSleepingInsomniac]

Is it me?
Who i am
Who i love
What i feel
Is it her?
Who she is
Who she loves
What she feels
Is it us?
Who we are
Who we love
What we feel
Well you got your wish
My lover i miss
Falling in an abyss
Of your own bitchyness

[Magenta]

I actually really liked this... something about the short phrasing stood out. Good job.

Not sure I liked the last word though... it just doesn't fit to me.

[TheSleepingInsomniac]

I actually really liked this... something about the short phrasing stood out. Good job.

Not sure I liked the last word though... it just doesn't fit to me.

I know that didn't fit i wrote this last night sleep deprived and depressed.

[Dimitri]

Very insightful.

[Magenta]

"Remiss" might work...

Hmm. Look up the definition and see if that works for you and makes sense.

Thanks for the + rep!