A Whisper Among Shouts (A poem)

[RelicHunter97]

I stare out the window
Slowly Fading
The life force inside me is dissolving in the emotion of it all
Too soon
Too fast
There is nowhere to turn
I am smothered by the rush
The calamity
Is there no one out there who can save me?
There must be
Yet
There isn’t
I am alone
Fearful
I see…
Over the horizon
There is a sign
But ‘tis nothing
There is a sudden noise
I am surprised to learn
It is my own soul
Screaming
Trapped by the nothingness
Then
In the window there is a figure
Death.
But he is not here for me
But for my sociality
My individuality
My personality
I am but a speck in the midst of it all
Then the maid of God sprayed Pledge on the Table of Living
And wiped any trace of me away.

[Cynical]

Good word choice and I enjoyed what the poem meant.

[RelicHunter97]

Thank you for your many thoughts :P

[Cosmic]

You've an impressive vocabulary for someone of your age - an interesting piece, with some nicely thought out images. Keep up the good work, you have a talent here.

Point for future improvement: Consider using grammar more readily to define the flow of the poem and the expression of some lines. This piece felt fragmented due to the structure (not necessarily a criticism), but it also felt a little lost because there was barely any grammatical cues for the reader. More use of commas and dashes would help you here.