What do you see?

[Scarface]

Light your last cigarette of fate
I want to slam your face on the grill
You want to see how I feel?
Look into my blood shot eyes
can you see the pain?
Tell me.....
What do you see?

I've taken what you've given, but you just can't give anymore
you're weak. After I took the scalpel out of your throat
Lay there in your own steaming pile of shit
I hate what you've done to me
Tell me.....
What do you see?

Take another pill can you feel me?
Take another sip, can you see me?
put your hand in this hole can I kill you?
take this fucking beating, can I break you?
Tell me..
What do you see?

Hear the bees buzzing in your head can you touch me?
Vultures picking at your corpse, it's all over
but when you wake up...
Tell me....
What do you see?
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This isn't something I usually do, but I liked the way it sounded in my head so I wrote it down. I don't need criticism because I don't do this shit.

[Kaius]

Its well written, well done. Did it just randomly come into your head or was it spurred on by something? Either way its good you can feel the emotion thats been put into it.

[Scarface]

Its well written, well done. Did it just randomly come into your head or was it spurred on by something? Either way its good you can feel the emotion thats been put into it.

This was the spark of the moment. The shit that's going on in my life at the moment. A lot of fucked up emotions. Thank you man, I didn't think it was that good.

[Iceman]

And yet another well written piece.

If you need someone to talk to let me know.

[deadpie]

Violent, honest, and swag. You should write more often.

[Scarface]

Thanks guys, it was definitely something I wanted to get out there. I'll try and write another one again sometime.