gotaquestion
May 6th, 2011, 06:58 PM
I have written a poem and I want some opinions. Please be cnsiderate because it is the first poem i have ever written.:)
Life, A road yet travled.
Life is a path yet travled
a road yet paved.
The road is ever winding and shifting
like a snake slithering along.
The road goes over mountains and through vallys
so it has its share of ups and downs.
For some, the road ends abruptly in a tragic crash.
For others, they never even have a chance to start the jorney.
Some make it to the very end.
Others speed through and never enjoy the trip.
I say slowit down and take the scenic rout.
I have a 2nd one I forgot I had wrote.
I saw love clearly.
She was slender, graceful, and beutiful
She turned and with a gentle hand powerfully riped my heart to three peices.
I saw her pink, fair skin
And heard her speak with a quiet, everchanging voice
And I felt torn
Life, A road yet travled.
Life is a path yet travled
a road yet paved.
The road is ever winding and shifting
like a snake slithering along.
The road goes over mountains and through vallys
so it has its share of ups and downs.
For some, the road ends abruptly in a tragic crash.
For others, they never even have a chance to start the jorney.
Some make it to the very end.
Others speed through and never enjoy the trip.
I say slowit down and take the scenic rout.
I have a 2nd one I forgot I had wrote.
I saw love clearly.
She was slender, graceful, and beutiful
She turned and with a gentle hand powerfully riped my heart to three peices.
I saw her pink, fair skin
And heard her speak with a quiet, everchanging voice
And I felt torn