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Totality
April 24th, 2011, 02:45 PM
Another new one - hope you enjoy!
**WARNING**


What's Life

Blood was pouring out,
He saw the knife lying there,
Next to the dead body,
She was naked and bare,

Slit 6 times,
Across each wrist,
Straight to the bone,
A great twist,

Slit across the throat,
Talk about good measure,
Raped and killed,
What a sick pleasure,

He imagined a hooded figure,
Stood with a bone scythe,
He glanced down,
Bloody Hell, What's Life?

Donkey
April 24th, 2011, 03:44 PM
Strangely enjoyable, nice one.

Totality
April 24th, 2011, 04:22 PM
Thanks,

I didn't know how it was gonna sound being read, but it sounded dark as I was writing it.

Tristin.
April 24th, 2011, 04:24 PM
dark, brilliatnly dark.

your use of rythem and rhym are brilliant. and the pace is good.

tristin's review: 10/10 :D

Totality
April 24th, 2011, 04:28 PM
Thanks ^^

I think this may be my best,

However, I do write like 5 a night haha

Tristin.
April 24th, 2011, 04:29 PM
i used to write alot if little things, not really poems, but sort if snippets of things lol, iv got loads on file lol

Cynical
April 24th, 2011, 04:30 PM
Simply amazing. Well written and it really gets the emotions going.

Totality
April 24th, 2011, 04:42 PM
Thanks ^^