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Old June 10th, 2005, 10:06 PM   #1
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Default im torn: please respond to this one!!!

laying there on the ground,
to silent to hear.
breathing the once rich air,
through his lungs.
In excruciating pain.

You have me until the last blood vessel breaks.
then i will have killed you.
All the whirling emotions you have caused.
All the sadness involved.
Your killing my sanity!
You are making me be you.
I am which ever way the wind blows.
I am a free spirit.
I'm evil hearted, im disgusted by your evocitive ways.
I can not control myself you are pulling me under your wrath.
Just let me bleed here.
Im no good use to you.
Im not exactly living anymore.
You are a murderer!
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Old June 11th, 2005, 08:32 AM   #2
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why does no one ever tell me what my writng is??
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Old June 14th, 2005, 09:21 PM   #3
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you is really me in disguise
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Old June 21st, 2005, 12:22 AM   #4
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wow! thats intense, i like it

I bet you're in a bar
Listening to a cheatin' song
Glass of Johnny Walker Red
With no one to take you home
They're probably closing down
Saying, "No more alcohol"
I bet you're in bar
'Cause I'm always your last call
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Old June 21st, 2005, 05:31 PM   #5
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thanx!
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Old June 24th, 2005, 07:37 AM   #6
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i though it was powerful and when i read it it reminded me of a battle that's going on inside while the weaker good side dies and the murderer stands above with an evil bloodstained joy upon his face

Sounds to me like Good Vs. Evil.

But evil won!
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Old June 24th, 2005, 07:32 PM   #7
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It was really good i liked it..you should continue writing ur really good at it...good luck
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