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Old December 26th, 2004, 05:24 AM  
advent_child
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Default Good job, but.....

It was good, but it seems like you are holding back. Let all your feelings spill on the screen when you write, dont be afraid of offending ppl. (i dont mean go call everyone a fag) i mean if u thik ur ex was a bitch say it, people want to know if poets can see beauty every day, even when its not pretty. (e.g. childbirth)(That has nothing to do with this because it sets a negative tone, but just its just a piece of advice from an rambling deep emotionally mixed kid.) No offense meant, really it was good. I liked it, just say what you wanted to do when this happened.

e.g. childbirth

The term "utopia" is combined from two Greek words — "no" (ou) and "place/land" (topos), thus meaning "nowhere" or more literally, "no-place/no-land."

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