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Old May 29th, 2005, 06:02 PM  
Lost_and_fallen
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When I saw how much was written, I actually didn't think I'd make it all the way through, but once I started reading your first post, I didn't stop all the way through. You have a very good narrative voice! The only criticism I can make, is sometimes you can be a little cliched. For instance, the children in the first one being blonde haired, blue eyed, one of them called 'Angel'....I don't know, it just seemed a little unoriginal to me? Hope to see more writing from you soon!
Laura

*...All the possibility and promise just weighs on me so heavily...*
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