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WanderingHeart
May 22nd, 2015, 09:22 PM
A poem by me. Just a free verse poem, nothing special.

"Xavier Came to Play Today."

Xavier came to play today
As well as my other friends
But the games we play aren't fun..
This game involves a pair of scissor
Maybe a razor
Or perhaps a knife
Whatever it may be, I must use it
To hurt myself
To create more damage
I suppose I deserve it, though.

Xavier came to play today
As well as my other friends
But the games we play kind of hurt...
This game involves my fists
Or a heavy object
I pound it against myself
Over and over again
They taught me to like it, though.

Xavier came to play today
As well as my other friends
But the games we play make me cry
This game involves my heart
And only my heart
We break it, crush it
Again and again
And we don't stop
No matter what
We can't play that game anymore, though
Because there's nothing left to break.

Xavier came to play today
As well as my other friends
And now I must warn you
To never let them in
Or they will do
What they have done to me.

Microcosm
May 22nd, 2015, 10:10 PM
Xavier sounds nice.

No jk but I like it. You should put some like poetic devices in there and stuff that represent the ideas of the poem.

WanderingHeart
May 23rd, 2015, 08:33 AM
Xavier sounds nice.

No jk but I like it. You should put some like poetic devices in there and stuff that represent the ideas of the poem.

Fanks :). I was too lazy to add any so I did free verse. I'll probably add some later, though when I edit it.
Glad you like it, though!

Elysium
May 23rd, 2015, 09:30 AM
You did make use of a literary/poetic device called anaphora, the repetition of a phrase at the beginning of each verse. Otherwise, as morbid and unsettling as the content is, I really like the writing, the title, and the lines you used repetitively. Well done :)

DeezNuts
May 23rd, 2015, 03:57 PM
Damnnnnn, this is some deep shit.

Dying Ember
May 27th, 2015, 11:58 AM
Woah - I must say this is a very honest poem, I really like it because it speaks the truth

WanderingHeart
May 27th, 2015, 04:33 PM
Thanks guys! I'm glad you all like it!