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Trivium
March 21st, 2017, 10:45 PM
The Beautiful Enigma

The butterfly lost among fireflies. Yes a firefly has a quick spark of beauty. Proving only to be nothing more than a mirage. iYou are the butterfly. A beautiful enigma of her own. The anomaly. She flys calmly around all the hovering fireflies. Knowing that she is far beyond conformity and simplicity. Only because the butterfly fought to be herself. From the grudges of the earth to a vessel. Returning only to be what she was meant to be. The gorgeous butterfly, the beautiful enigma.

- Trivium Xurts Victus-

Amethyst Rose
March 22nd, 2017, 11:18 PM
Omg that's really good :)! Your word choice makes the whole thing feel liberating and it's just so pretty. It's choppy with all the periods though... you can combine some of those fragmented bits by replacing periods with commas and semicolons in some places. I really like it though!

Trivium
March 22nd, 2017, 11:36 PM
Thank you! I really Appreciate your feedback! I have not wrote in a long time so it could probably use some shaping up