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Space Delta
February 11th, 2017, 12:28 PM
When I first saw you stand by the rose bush,
I was sure that it was love at first sight.
My wonder was excited - and in a rush,
Blood hurried to my face, adding to my plight.
I never even realized it back then,
But your face was all that was impressive.
When I first saw your behavior with men,
I wanted your this trait to be recessive.
I think I may not have been thinking straight,
The heat may have affected me in some way.
Or maybe I did not try to self-debate,
Try and convince myself to walk away.
Had I known this oasis was a mirage,
It would have saved me for tasks rewarding.

February 11th, 2017, 12:35 PM
I've never written/read many sonnets, so I can't give any technical feedback. I can say I enjoyed it though, and I like the last two lines a lot :)

February 11th, 2017, 01:55 PM
Good sonnet work! I've only read a few sonnets, so like Amethyst I can't offer you much feedback, but I find it incredibly difficult to write sonnet work so good job :)

March 6th, 2017, 03:19 PM
Good poetry, I read it with pleasure