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Hudor
April 3rd, 2016, 10:56 AM
Free

Today on the wings of wind, I ride
Drifting and diving, wilful and wild,
Breaking apart the now-feeble chains
And away from the crushing clamor of claims,
I breathe in the dawn and embrace the rising light
And into the unknown, I take my maiden flight.

The stars are but blazing spheres ahead
That lie within my ever-widening grasp
Fire and freedom flow through my veins
As i burn my bridges to the past
And oh! Look now how the world shines for me
As I rise and soar, unhindered, building castles of glass.

Yet as the winds change, ebb and die
My wings grow heavy and i fight to fly
And unanchored as I drift into space
All my crystal castles dissolve without trace
And the rising light that I had cherished within
Grows distant and cold, as my fall begins.

The flint that had once kindled sparks in my mind
Now chafes against my scalded limbs and heart
And freedom chains me with the broken links
Of regulations and responsibilities, I flung apart
And for their love and warmth, as I now yearn
All my visions seems worth less than none.
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The theme is the concept of freedom. I believe absolute freedom can eventually be detrimental for the person and that some limitations are essential for stability and actual happiness.

ImCoolBeans
April 4th, 2016, 07:26 AM
I like it a lot, you use good imagery and language throughout it and it kept me interested the whole way through. This could be a song! Very powerful.

Hudor
April 4th, 2016, 10:41 AM
I like it a lot, you use good imagery and language throughout it and it kept me interested the whole way through. This could be a song! Very powerful.

Thanks! I'm glad you like it. Several people told me they found it powerful as well and I'm happy how it materialized eventually.
Not gonna lie. This took a lot more effort than any of my other works and i almost left it. I'm glad i finished it though.
Also, now that you mentioned it, several tunes are popping up in my head. If a song happens, i'll share it with you guys for sure :D