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lena
December 26th, 2013, 11:19 PM
So I used to dabble in writing poetry and now that I need a poem for ELA I am blanking out. Does anyone have advice on how to improve this?

Sleep silently with blood lust eyes
Open them to terrors cries
Peace, you wont find, not deep inside
the time is near theyre coming

wake dreadfully to demons cries
terror near, pain wont subside
dig deeper, theres no place to hide
speak silently, theyre listening

bow your head down to repent
see the truth with clear intent
run further without moving
theyre closing in theyre coming

up ahead no place to run
back to dead end empty gun
no place to hide no where to go
the time is here theyre coming

bow your head so low to cry
you lost the fight you lost your pride
no time to say a last good
weep silently its over

..I know I don't have punctuation...

Hudor
May 20th, 2014, 10:19 AM
So I used to dabble in writing poetry and now that I need a poem for ELA I am blanking out. Does anyone have advice on how to improve this?

Sleep silently with blood lust eyes
Open them to terrors cries
Peace, you wont find, not deep inside
the time is near they're coming

wake dreadfully to demons cries
terror near, pain wont subside
dig deeper, there's no place to hide
speak silently, they're listening

bow your head down to repent
see the truth with clear intent
run further without moving
theyre closing in theyre coming

up ahead no place to run
back to dead end empty gun
no place to hide no where to go
the time is here they're coming

bow your head so low to cry
you lost the fight you lost your pride
no time to say a last good
weep silently its over

..I know I don't have punctuation...

I only just saw this thread. Maybe its of no use to you any more but just in case here is my version.

Slink in silence to sleep tonight
Enfold the darkness in bloodshot eyes
Struggle to stay the blood and cries
Those jeer and scorn the failed might
Peace you won’t find, not deep inside
The time is near, they’re coming.

Awaken dreadful to the demon’s voice
Whispering the truth of the wasted choice
Wriggle and writhe but the pain won’t subside
Dig deeper for there’s no place to hide
Speak softly, they’re listening.

Lower your guns, those in fear spent
Bow your head down to repent
Grasp the truth through the haze
Belie the devils that deride and faze
Run faster and further, without moving
They’re closing in, calm and cunning.

Up ahead the blank walls loom
No place to hide from the inevitable doom
A fire devours the world tonight
Defeating the effort to stand and fight
The time is here, they've come.

Lower your head in a final try
To hide the tears and endlessly cry
You lost the battle, you lost your pride
No time to bid the last goodbye
Weep in silence it’s all over.

Hollywood
May 30th, 2014, 07:10 AM
I only just saw this thread. Maybe its of no use to you any more but just in case here is my version.

Slink in silence to sleep tonight
Enfold the darkness in bloodshot eyes
Struggle to stay the blood and cries
Those jeer and scorn the failed might
Peace you won’t find, not deep inside
The time is near, they’re coming.

Awaken dreadful to the demon’s voice
Whispering the truth of the wasted choice
Wriggle and writhe but the pain won’t subside
Dig deeper for there’s no place to hide
Speak softly, they’re listening.

Lower your guns, those in fear spent
Bow your head down to repent
Grasp the truth through the haze
Belie the devils that deride and faze
Run faster and further, without moving
They’re closing in, calm and cunning.

Up ahead the blank walls loom
No place to hide from the inevitable doom
A fire devours the world tonight
Defeating the effort to stand and fight
The time is here, they've come.

Lower your head in a final try
To hide the tears and endlessly cry
You lost the battle, you lost your pride
No time to bid the last goodbye
Weep in silence it’s all over.

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